Monday, October 13, 2008

New Poem

I wrote this great new piece that's already been published here (it's on page 3035) if you want to see the original.


Refraining Solitude

Vegetation and mischief
Lusty and untrammeled
Prudence and glory
Shaking

Taking

More inborn than a
durability
Taking above a
man
Your inbred mankind
Refraining on a strength
At a congenital piece




I'm thinking about changing the word untrammelled though...it just doesn't sound like me....maybe just trampy.... wow, i sound really tense too. I need some valium.

1 comment:

  1. Scott,

    This is pure power - but I would keep untrammeled - it's a word that forces feeling. I am almost uncomfortable reading it... that's why I love it. Nice job

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